Randomness
Jun. 24th, 2003 07:15 pm![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
beandelphikiWheeee! Finals are over!
I think I aced both my exams, so that is yayness.
Today was the first day I saw a guy jacking off in a bathroom stall. I just caught the flash of his watch face moving up and down when I was at the sink washing my hands. Oy. I mean....just...oy. I am SO terrified of the idea of ever being that sexual. I am scared shitless.
I got my English essay back, with a B+. That's probably the worst mark I've gotten in an English class in a looong time. Like I care. This is the worst English class I've taken in a looong time.
The essay comments:
Your introduction is more awkward and confusing this time. It sounds as if you were trying to say too much too quickly and too formally.
If it sounds like I was trying to get it over with lady, that's because I WAS. I've never had a more boring essay topic.
Once again, you obviously read the novel carefully
HA!
and identified the thematic and structural importance of marriage.
Well, that's what you TOLD us to write about, after all.
You also chose effect relationships to illustrate your thesis. You organize your different examples nicely by relating them all to some effect on Elizabeth. It is the one feature that gives your rather basic ideas some originality.
I tend to be more original when I don't have to cite at least three critical works within a 1000 word essay. Oh, and when the topic doesn't put me to sleep.
You also use good, brief quotes.
Because I can't be bothered with long ones.
You do omit/ignore Mr. C's main reason for wanting to get married - Lady C's "suggestion" that to retain his position, he needs a wife.
Oops. I must have missed that in my "careful" read-throughs of the novel, eh?
Your use of scale is interesting, but I think your readers would have trouble applying it to all of your comments.
Hey, I didn't like it either, but you did give us that scale yourself.
Finally, you have a tendency to judge the unions from a 2003 point-of-view.[ie., That it's unfortunate Charlotte marries for security.] This is unfair to Austen.
When writing essays for you, no matter how boring the topic is, do NOT, repeat, do NOT take ideas from my class notes. Got it.
...Now you need to eliminate all the dashes. They create the same grammatical problems as the semi-colon and add to the confusion of your presentation. Accept the period; it's a clear and safe little punctuation mark.
Yes. ma'am.
Dan, I have enjoyed you in class this term.
In class, but I bet you didn't enjoy my emails, didja?
Your enthusiasm for and understanding of the texts were obvious, and I appreciate your willingness to contribute your interesting, often challenging, ideas to class discussions.
I barely opened my mouth, except to point out when you missed a point of reference from the text...
I hope that you now have a chance for some well-earned rest and a little gentle reading.
Hey, I didn't mind the texts this term, and I'd invite you to read stuff like that with me and offer exchanges, but...oh. Wait. You think Austen is too hard, and Miller is dreary, and Faulkner hurts your brain, and...um. Nevermind.
Now I just need to find out how horribly I did on my astronomy project. *covers eyes* I hope I at least pass. But that's iffy. Stupid move...
I'm hungry. And I need to get a job now.
Edit I planned to read my friends list, but my binder is driving me insane. Arrg. Catch you all later then, I'm going home.
I think I aced both my exams, so that is yayness.
Today was the first day I saw a guy jacking off in a bathroom stall. I just caught the flash of his watch face moving up and down when I was at the sink washing my hands. Oy. I mean....just...oy. I am SO terrified of the idea of ever being that sexual. I am scared shitless.
I got my English essay back, with a B+. That's probably the worst mark I've gotten in an English class in a looong time. Like I care. This is the worst English class I've taken in a looong time.
The essay comments:
Your introduction is more awkward and confusing this time. It sounds as if you were trying to say too much too quickly and too formally.
If it sounds like I was trying to get it over with lady, that's because I WAS. I've never had a more boring essay topic.
Once again, you obviously read the novel carefully
HA!
and identified the thematic and structural importance of marriage.
Well, that's what you TOLD us to write about, after all.
You also chose effect relationships to illustrate your thesis. You organize your different examples nicely by relating them all to some effect on Elizabeth. It is the one feature that gives your rather basic ideas some originality.
I tend to be more original when I don't have to cite at least three critical works within a 1000 word essay. Oh, and when the topic doesn't put me to sleep.
You also use good, brief quotes.
Because I can't be bothered with long ones.
You do omit/ignore Mr. C's main reason for wanting to get married - Lady C's "suggestion" that to retain his position, he needs a wife.
Oops. I must have missed that in my "careful" read-throughs of the novel, eh?
Your use of scale is interesting, but I think your readers would have trouble applying it to all of your comments.
Hey, I didn't like it either, but you did give us that scale yourself.
Finally, you have a tendency to judge the unions from a 2003 point-of-view.[ie., That it's unfortunate Charlotte marries for security.] This is unfair to Austen.
When writing essays for you, no matter how boring the topic is, do NOT, repeat, do NOT take ideas from my class notes. Got it.
...Now you need to eliminate all the dashes. They create the same grammatical problems as the semi-colon and add to the confusion of your presentation. Accept the period; it's a clear and safe little punctuation mark.
Yes. ma'am.
Dan, I have enjoyed you in class this term.
In class, but I bet you didn't enjoy my emails, didja?
Your enthusiasm for and understanding of the texts were obvious, and I appreciate your willingness to contribute your interesting, often challenging, ideas to class discussions.
I barely opened my mouth, except to point out when you missed a point of reference from the text...
I hope that you now have a chance for some well-earned rest and a little gentle reading.
Hey, I didn't mind the texts this term, and I'd invite you to read stuff like that with me and offer exchanges, but...oh. Wait. You think Austen is too hard, and Miller is dreary, and Faulkner hurts your brain, and...um. Nevermind.
Now I just need to find out how horribly I did on my astronomy project. *covers eyes* I hope I at least pass. But that's iffy. Stupid move...
I'm hungry. And I need to get a job now.
Edit I planned to read my friends list, but my binder is driving me insane. Arrg. Catch you all later then, I'm going home.
