New Poem

[beandelphiki]

I poem I just wrote, as yet untitled (any suggestions?)

If I were to write
a poem
about the prejudice
and harassment
I face
every day,
it would be hard

without using large,
alphabet-block words
like trans
sexual
and gender
identity
that interrupt the
cool flow
of a river
of poetry.

So,
if you wouldn't mind
my splashing
in the water
can I ask
What the fuck are you staring at?

I wrote that at 3:15 exactly this morning. I knew I'd just hate myself if I forgot it by morning. I'm glad no one was there to see me in my p.j.'s (inside out, as it happens) with my hair standing on end in a bed-head mow-hawk, while I searched for a pen in my disaster of a room. (I am cleaning it!)

Comments

[ex-nez931.livejournal.com]

thats real good dude.

[beandelphiki.livejournal.com]

Thanks, dude! Normally I try to write stuff that sounds pretty, but not this time...;)

[fanelia.livejournal.com]

ugh...pretty

i think you've got some interesting talent there in poetry, its nice because it could be used to talk about a lot of other things like racial hate and stuff, very interesting.

[beandelphiki.livejournal.com]

I'm afraid I don't know much about racial hate first-hand, being almost completely white, myself (on my mom's side there's a little bit of Cree) so I don't think I have any authority to write about it. Heck, I don't even have much second-hand experience with it. I tend to write about stuff that affects me immediately - "Write what you know" - otherwise, it's crap. But I know you write Lester, so why don't you try it?

Yeah, pretty...I'm of the opinion good poetry should sound nice. (I didn't mean I write about flowers, rainbows, or kittens, dude, if that's what you're thinking. Blech.)

[fanelia.livejournal.com]

well i've grown up all my life as an azn, don't plan on switching, i've also (sorry about the genrealization but its reasonably true) a lot of american ignorance towards canadians. and so i know a great deal about it

though nothing compares to the racial hate directed toward azns.

[groovycat.livejournal.com]

sorry to stalk you, but i do love your poem and so had to comment.

[maxx-gabriel.livejournal.com]

i'm just checking out random journals that i find on the ftm friends list and i found you and this. this poem is really great. i just thought i'd comment and let you know how much i dig it.

[beandelphiki.livejournal.com]

Thanks a lot. I love hearing feedback on my poetry. Everyone seems to like this one. Or it could be that...tons of people absolutely loathe it, and they haven't bothered to say so b/c they're so disgusted. Heh.